The line I like in the poem ‘silver’ is:
“Couched in his kennel, like a log ,with paws of silver sleeps the dog,”
because it has a simile, like a log. If I was the author I would change it by changing it into a metaphor rather than a simile.
Dyani
Tanzanite
That poem was really nice,the way it rhymed made me fell warm. My favourite part was,
“moveless fish in the water gleam by silver reeds in a silver stream,” because it rhymed in a certen way ,
good luck on poetry day. 🙂 🙂
the poem is so lovley that I love the part when it says the movless fish in the water gleem I also love when it says slowly siently now the moon walks the night in her silver shoon my reason is i can picture it in my head and i can see fish not able to swim and it makes me feel sad and lonley
I liked the lines of the poem ..silver fruit upon silver trees then the next one is ..Of doves in a silver feathered sleep
The line A harvest mouse goes scampering by with a silver claw with A silver eye gives me A image of a mouse with silver claws and A silver eye because the moon light is shining on the mouse witch makes it with silver parts of the body.
My favourite line of Silver was the line that said ‘ And moveless fish in the water gleam’ because it painted a pretty, sparkly picture in my mind. I think there should be another line of the poem: A Hedgehog curls up in a ball against a rough wall.
I love all of it it is the best poem I really love it wow it was amazing every day I sang it in the shower in class I would love to show the class and do the actions with it and I forgot to say before HAPPY BIRTHDAY.
The line I like in the poem ‘silver’ is:
“Couched in his kennel, like a log ,with paws of silver sleeps the dog,”
because it has a simile, like a log. If I was the author I would change it by changing it into a metaphor rather than a simile.
Dyani
Tanzanite
That poem was really nice,the way it rhymed made me fell warm. My favourite part was,
“moveless fish in the water gleam by silver reeds in a silver stream,” because it rhymed in a certen way ,
good luck on poetry day. 🙂 🙂
I am happy with my part
I loved the poem!
I loved it!
I like the part when it said the moveless fish in the water gleam
and also I imagine the dog laying like a log
the poem is so lovley that I love the part when it says the movless fish in the water gleem I also love when it says slowly siently now the moon walks the night in her silver shoon my reason is i can picture it in my head and i can see fish not able to swim and it makes me feel sad and lonley
Thank you Dyani for your lovely comment and I agree with you with the metaphor.
by Rameesa
I liked the lines of the poem ..silver fruit upon silver trees then the next one is ..Of doves in a silver feathered sleep
The line A harvest mouse goes scampering by with a silver claw with A silver eye gives me A image of a mouse with silver claws and A silver eye because the moon light is shining on the mouse witch makes it with silver parts of the body.
I like your idea of a metaphor Dyani.
from Luke.
I love the line when it said’ slowly silently now the moon walks the night in her silver’. shoon because shoon moon rims.
My favourite line of Silver was the line that said ‘ And moveless fish in the water gleam’ because it painted a pretty, sparkly picture in my mind. I think there should be another line of the poem: A Hedgehog curls up in a ball against a rough wall.
BY MARTHA AMBER CLASS
I like the poem because I like stuff that are silver because its shiny
and I like silver its so shiny the poems great from Ricky amber
THE LINE I LIKE IN THE POEM ‘SILVER’ IS:
“WALKS THE NIGHT IN HER SILVER SHOON”
BECAUSE IT HAS ALLITERATION
Diani, I love your comment, I agree with you that the poem needs a metaphor in it. BY MARTHA
I love all of it it is the best poem I really love it wow it was amazing every day I sang it in the shower in class I would love to show the class and do the actions with it and I forgot to say before HAPPY BIRTHDAY.
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